Wednesday, October 7, 2009

Sentence 3

Baba burst out in gales of his deep-throated laughter - a sound not unlike a truck engine revving up - and, when he could talk again, explained to us the concept of voice dubbing.

From Kite Runner by Khaled Hosseini

An incomplete thought with a descriptive phrase set apart by dashes and then continued to finish up the sentence.

Mariah yelled out in her ear-piercing yelp - a sound not unlike a police siren zooming by - and, when she could breath again, exclaimed that she had saw a spider.

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